CRITIQUE MY WORK

Hey guys, I've finally worked out how to request critiques on my work, so I've done so on three of my best relatively recent works:
Siren SongA voice rings in my head but not my ear,
Telling me all I don’t want to hear,
Like how in this life I don’t belong
And so begins the silent siren song…
 
Everything is great, maybe even divine,
Yet I’m still not okay or even barely fine.
Everything is alright but I’m all wrong,
Being driven insane by that siren song…
 
Every moment seems to last forever,
In a cycle that even love can’t sever.
This short life feels far too long
When hearing the slow siren song…
 
The voice still echoes within my head,
Singing of everything it knows I dread.
I’m starting to lose the will to carry on,
Sick of hearing this siren song…
 
I start to wonder if Death’s endless bliss
Is worth the pain of those that would miss
Me when I’m forever dead and gone,
Overcome and taken by the siren song…
 
Death is sounding more and more attractive
As I lose track of reasons to continue to live.
So now I’m givi
Wings
I was drowning for over two years
In a sea of agony and crimson tears.
Now I’m free and all I want to do
Is spend my forever with you.
 
I was in the Blue, way over my head
To the point where I wished I was dead.
Now not only do I simply survive;
Now, thanks to you, I can finally fly.
 
I know the future is shrouded in mystery,
But past and present have no goal to see.
I know the concept of forever may be fake
But that’s a chance I am willing to take.
 
"You have to fall before spreading your wings"
Well none have fallen any further than me;
I’m falling for you beyond the point of saving,
But at least I’m falling with some company,
Head over heels and there’s no way I’d rather be
Than side by side, shooting for eternity...
MemoryMany ghosts lie within our heads,
But none of them want to lay to rest.
Eventually they will stop coming back
And finally just fade away to black.
 
Have you ever wondered when the present
Will become just another forgotten moment?
Have you ever wondered when we will be
Just another bittersweet memory?
 
We lie awake at night, trying not to dream,
Trying not to see anything we can believe.
We only want us and this to last forever,
Never to become just a night to remember.
 
Everything must eventually come to an end,
No matter how hard we try and pretend.
We all know that everything must eventually
Fall and fade away to just a distant memory.
 
Although we try to forever stay aflight,
Someday we will all lose the fight
And fall away with burning wax wings
Into Death’s arms, always awaiting.
 
While we forever worry about the future
And clutch to a past we can barely remember,
We all know that one day, someday, we
Will all fade to a forgotten memory…&

Please read or reread them and try to come up with a critique (which you type in the box above the comments in each work)
If you can't think of anything or honestly can't be bothered, then that's ok, but if you do use this feature and give me your thoughts, I'd appreciate it a lot
Jayden